Young Story Writer in Year 5

Fraser In year 5 has been trying really hard with his independent writing and would love to have some feedback from you all! He is thinking about making this a regular blog. What do you think?

Chapter 1
2037 USA

In the USA in 2037 Agent James is undercover to find out what Alex's evil plans are. James has a spy dog, he is 9. James is 32. James is walking with his dog spying on their rival when they saw a robber breaking into a bank. “Stop” shouted James chasing him into the bank. He caught him and brought him to the floor. The cops came and arrested him. “Thanks again James” said the cops. As James was getting back to spying on Alex he saw him with a console under his arm. “How peculiar” thought James. The door was open, Alex wasn't looking so James darted to the door, got in and hid. Being in his rival's base was cool plus he had machine’s building robot’s, and then putting the robot’s into consoles. He then stared at the generator. “Wow” he thought. As he moved on he saw the consoles piled up, there where millions of them.

It was Christmas eve and tomorrow he would get his gadgets as a Christmas present .Alex was on the move so all James would have to do is keep up. Alex went into the bank and came out with £1487.25 to be precise but then vans started coming out the back of Alex’s base. In shop’s crowds started to gather for the new console, the Pro 64. The attractive console was snow white with Alex’s logo stamped upon it.  The five aisles of consoles ready to be.