Descriptive facts

1/11/2017

Year 5 have been learning about facts and opinions and have been trying to write descriptive sentences that are facts about this picture. Here are some examples from 5JH...

"The moon is lurking above the icy white turrets."
"The turrets shoot out of the palace like trees."
"The icy castle is lurking through the enormous snowy hills."
"The castle is light blue and the snow is all over the turrets."

We would love to hear what you think!

12 Comments

Laura Trepess

1/11/2017 10:41:09 am

These sentences are fantastic year 5, they create a real atmosphere in my head. They make me want to read more!
Well done!

Mr Watson link

1/11/2017 10:47:56 am

What an inspirational image and I love the sentences you've written! Made me want to write one of my own...

"As the cascading waters settled, the mist gently crept from its surface, while the towering structure majestically rose from the water's icy breath."

Mr Garza

1/11/2017 10:49:13 am

I love the amount of detail that is given in these statements! They have encouraged me to truly envision the environment!!

Mrs Williams

1/11/2017 11:15:23 am

These are great Year 5! Some excellent examples of personification and similes. You should be very proud of your efforts.

Mrs Cain

1/11/2017 01:16:42 pm

Fantastic writing from 5JH. I like the word 'lurk'- makes it all seem very dangerous and threatening!

Mrs Benson

1/11/2017 01:58:18 pm

Wow! What super sentences Year 5 - no wonder Mr Holmes is proud of you. I did enjoy your use of words, especially 'lurking ' and 'shoot'. Keep up the good work!

Mr Gillott

1/11/2017 03:22:40 pm

I really like how the moon and icy castle have been described as 'lurking' - it really adds a sense of drama to the description. Now I want to read some more to find out what will happen next.

Miss Travers

1/11/2017 03:27:31 pm

I love the use of the word 'lurking'. It made the image seem really spooky - ideal for Halloween time!

Ms Clasby

1/11/2017 05:15:25 pm

Wow, I love the idea of the turrets shooting out of the castle like trees from the ground! It makes them sound menacing and majestic! Good job year 5; I can see you have worked really hard. I hope we can hear more of these in the future!

Miss Jennings

1/11/2017 06:46:44 pm

Wow-what a fantastic selection of sentences! My favourite one is ‘the turrets shoot out of the palace like trees’. It’s an excellent simile. Well done!

Mr Stevens

1/11/2017 08:50:10 pm

These are some fantastic sentences 5JH. You have really captured the image within your descriptions and paint a very vivid picture for those who may only see the sentences. Well done all!

Mr Holmes and 5JH

2/11/2017 10:26:27 am

Thank you all for your feedback, we all really enjoyed hearing what you thought! We decided to try and use some of your great words in our new opinion sentences today. I hope you like them...
"I think the castle is a beautiful structure cascading across the environment."
"I think the castle is absolutely fascinating."
"The castle is colossal and ancient"

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